I read this one not long after it was posted, and only now I comment! Bad, bad me.
First of all, I absolutely love it. It was such a fun, fun read. And I admit that I'm a sucker for stories that have the guy falling for the girl first (or at least shows his side of the story).
There are so many different directions that one could go with this pair! The beauty of Joe/Luka stands on the matter of a comfortable friendship and sense of equality that they seem to share in canon, and this could totally go either the way of them actually being together (the "quiet relationship" kind of thing) or really being friends, only with benefits. And your choice of the latter fit like a glove for this story :D
Joe's characterization was very well-done. He is that brooding, cool type, but in reality has hot fire burning inside. I like how you described his struggle with his developing of feelings for Luka, something that he realizes in a very strong way (then again... this is Yuki Gai we're talking about, LOL. It wasn't some random loser :P). It was new for him, certainly, and probably quite frustrating, for the lack of a better word. And as a former soldier, there really was only one way that he knew to work out said frustration: training. That was a spot-on.
The other way that he would know involves company. Except said company was the cause so there would be that :P
I wonder if Luka has any idea that Joe can no longer assure her of no promises or strings. Upon seeing the story itself, she doesn't give anything away. Then again, this is Luka, who despite looking one of the most straightforward characters, is also one of the most full-of-layers type. Full of walls, too. She's not that different from Joe in terms of setting up a personal wall, through which very few, if any, can go through. Her teammates included.
Not that I think Joe would give her up, should he hit said wall. He let her go "that time". That sounds like a promise to me. He's fallen for her, and my guess is, he will want her to fall along with him. Oh, how I would love to see that unfold!
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Date: 2011-09-27 02:07 am (UTC)First of all, I absolutely love it. It was such a fun, fun read. And I admit that I'm a sucker for stories that have the guy falling for the girl first (or at least shows his side of the story).
There are so many different directions that one could go with this pair! The beauty of Joe/Luka stands on the matter of a comfortable friendship and sense of equality that they seem to share in canon, and this could totally go either the way of them actually being together (the "quiet relationship" kind of thing) or really being friends, only with benefits. And your choice of the latter fit like a glove for this story :D
Joe's characterization was very well-done. He is that brooding, cool type, but in reality has hot fire burning inside. I like how you described his struggle with his developing of feelings for Luka, something that he realizes in a very strong way (then again... this is Yuki Gai we're talking about, LOL. It wasn't some random loser :P). It was new for him, certainly, and probably quite frustrating, for the lack of a better word. And as a former soldier, there really was only one way that he knew to work out said frustration: training. That was a spot-on.
The other way that he would know involves company. Except said company was the cause so there would be that :PI wonder if Luka has any idea that Joe can no longer assure her of no promises or strings. Upon seeing the story itself, she doesn't give anything away. Then again, this is Luka, who despite looking one of the most straightforward characters, is also one of the most full-of-layers type. Full of walls, too. She's not that different from Joe in terms of setting up a personal wall, through which very few, if any, can go through. Her teammates included.
Not that I think Joe would give her up, should he hit said wall. He let her go "that time". That sounds like a promise to me. He's fallen for her, and my guess is, he will want her to fall along with him. Oh, how I would love to see that unfold!
Thanks for sharing!